IELTS Model Essay: Sharing Information

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Here is another of my IELTS model essays for IELTS Writing Task 2. I’ve also added an activity at the bottom of the page. It’s a discuss both views essay question:

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

(Cambridge IELTS Book 12 Test 5)

My Thoughts

This is quite a tricky question, partly because the 2 views are NOT opposites:

  • View 1 is that it’s good to freely share as much information as possible. (It is NOT arguing that ALL information should be freely shared.)
  • View 2 is that some information shouldn’t be freely shared.

My Position: I agree with BOTH views: I think as much information as possible should be shared, but some information shouldn’t be shared.

My Plan

View 1: it’s good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and academia
– e.g. peer reviews of new research underpin academic progress
– same goes for scientific research – collaboration is often essential

View 2: some information is too important or valuable to be shared freely
– e.g. financial information
– military and intelligence secrets
– intellectual property – people need an incentive to create new technology

My Model Essay

We now live in an age where information is a valuable commodity and can drive progress. However, there is some debate over how much of that information should be shared freely.

There are several arguments in favour of the idea that as much knowledge as possible should be shared, and in fact in some domains it is essential. Academic progress is underpinned by the ability to peer-review new research and theories, and similarly, in scientific research, collaboration between different scientists is often essential in making new breakthroughs. The development of the Internet, for example, was only made possible by openly sharing its architecture so that everyone could use it. There are also arguments in favour of sharing certain types of business information, such as management methods and findings related to employee performance, as these might help to improve a country’s economic competitiveness.

However, there must be limits as to what can be shared. It would be absurd for companies to share their financial accounts openly as this would make it easy for their rivals to compete unfairly, and a lot of personal information should be similarly protected. And while sharing new findings can be useful, it is important to understand that sometimes these are often made at considerable expense in terms of time and money. There would be less incentive to develop intellectual property like new technologies and new drugs if they were instantly shared for everyone to duplicate.

Therefore there needs to be a balance between sharing and protecting information. Some types of information can, and must, be shared freely, but not when it would discourage the creation of that information.

(272 words)

Activity

Without looking at the model essay above, try to complete my essay by filling in the blank spaces.

About the author

Charlie is a former IELTS Examiner with 25 years' teaching experience all over the world. His courses, for both English language learners and teachers, have been taken by over 100,000 students in over 160 countries around the world.

3 thoughts on “IELTS Model Essay: Sharing Information”

  1. Hi, thanks for your excellent writing.
    in the sentence “in scientific research, collaboration between different scientists is often essential in making new breakthroughs”, I think it is correct to write “essential to” rather than “essential in”.
    Thanks

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  2. Thanks for the activity.

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  3. In this day and age information has become a valuable commodity. Therefore , many are suggesting that information should be shared freely. While others believe that some information should be protected. In this essay I will be discussing both views and why I totally agree with the second notion.

    To begin with, in order to prosper in some domains, sharing information is crucial. For example, academic progress is underpinned by the ability to peer review research and theories. Moreover, collaboration in the scientific field through passing by information have led to multiple scientific breakthroughs such as determining that the DNA has double helix structure which was done when two scientists joined forces and information.

    However, not all information could be shared, sensitive information that is related to intelligence and military should be secured for national security purposes. Furthermore, in regard to international companies it would be dangerous to share financial and business details because this information could be used by competitors. And last but not least, when it comes to technology, sharing new findings is important. However, we should understand that these technological innovations are often made at a considerable expense in terms of time and money so it would be unwise to share them for rival companies to duplicate.

    In conclusion, sharing academic and scientific information have helped humanity to progress and develop and also saved lives. However, some information is better kept secure such as information related to technological advancements , military and intelligence due to the fact that sharing it might lead to negative consequences.

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